Talk:Chapter 5 - Encounter with the Devil/@comment-4072803-20150119054711

That ending. THAT ENDING THOUGH. I can genuinely say I did not see that coming. I'm a bit curious about why that dialogue led to her recalling Payla's warnings though. I mean, I understand being embarrased but being scared is a bit odd, at least with Axel and Jaina's established personalities (Axel being a bit of an idiot/man child and Jaina being Jaina). Awkward without a doubt, and I can buy it being frightening, but Payla's warnings didn't really seem to imply that (unless Axel has a molestation record or something, unlikely for a character like him but then again, there's the Kid Goku syndrome). Still, it was well executed and even made me laugh slightly, because the situation struck me more as a humorous one than one of tension.

I'm a bit curious though, why the title "Encounter with the Devil"? Or, rather, who is the titular Devil? Is it a reference to Raven, Payla, the Magic Council in general, Axel (?!), or the waitress lady? It's a good title but it did lead me to think that the villain of this arc or the series as a whole was going to pop up. A bit of a red herring.

All in all though, it was still a good chapter. Grammar and overall writing remain as good as ever and I still enjoy these characters and how they interact.

8/10