Talk:Golems, Barriers, and Gems! Oh My!: Timothy Gusto's S-Class Trial Phase Two/@comment-26015064-20170614185901

Creativity: 4/5: While you're the first person I've seen target the joints, all I really saw from Timothy was bombarding the golem with progressively stronger and stronger air blades. Not very unique in and of itself. Although, you made up for that through the usage of his Thought Projection and other rmental abilities.

Logic: 4/5: Timothy didn't really do anything stupid or out of the ordinary, so I can't fault you too much on this part. Although, personally I don't think a Thought Projection would work on a non-sentient being, but someone else might have a different opinion so I can't deduct points for that. Although, I think Timothy would've sustained more damage from a sneak attack from the rock golem's diamond-hard arm striking him in the back.

Use of Scenarios: 5/5: You utilized all the requirements and in a more unique manner than from what I've seen so far.

Overall Story: 2/5: While you did well in the other categories, the story really suffered in comparison to your last trial's story. Sentence structure was strange and seemed to lack any emotion. I couldn't get a feel for what Timothy felt in the story except for finding comedy in what the golem was doing. The golem frankly wouldn't have been emotional at all in my opinion, as it was being directly controlled by William, who wouldn't have even considered programming an idiotic golem for his guild's S-Class Trial. The biggest problem however was how easy you made it seem for Timothy. The golem's body was as strong as diamonds, which wouldn't allow for him to cut through it so easily. Sure he attacked the joints, and sure wind can erode rock, but after the initial arm cutting you never indicated that attacked the joints anymore, and you seemed to imply that the blades were able to cut through any part of the golem later on in the story. And as I stated, wind can erode rock, but not nearly as effectively as to cut through a diamond hard substance. You'd at best be progressively scratching into it that early on in the fight. Another thing that made it seem too easy was that Timothy finished the trial with more than half his time left, and he spent six minutes of that walking on his path.

Overall Score: 15/20

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