Talk:Shigure Kurosu/@comment-4666155-20130311014407

Alright. Your friendly neighborhood admin, Aha here. Like I said on Angela's page, a character image inside an infobox should never be in a thumbnail. Remove the thumbnail, adjust the pixels. 300px will do. As prior, in the introductory paragraph, her name should be in bold, followed by the hiragana/katakana/kanji in paranthesis. You have the kanji for Shigure's name, it merely needs to be formatted like this: Shigure Kurosu (しぐれ黒須 Kurosu Shigure).

The relationships section should be placed below the abilities section, please alter that.

Psychic magic is more properly translated as (超能力の魔法 Chōnōryoku no Mahō). This website should help you more with translations. However, the concept of psychic magic is fairly interesting, but "Telekinesis", "Levitation", and "Mind Reading" (not "Mind Reader") should be listed by bullet points, as they all extend from Psychic Magic. Now, when it comes to how this magic is written...it's written poorly. Please never use words like "you" when writing a character article unless it is in a character quote, or, for some strange reason, the character is actually named "You". It makes it sound off, it doesn't meet the eyes well. The magic section should be rewritten, with any instance of "you" being replaced by "opponent", "target", or other similar words.

I'll look forward to when this article is corrected.