Talk:Kazaku Imita/@comment-4666155-20140528055420

Okay, so let's see...Ikaruza, my first gripe with this article would be grammar. There's a bit too much to actually point out in a comment like this, but I notice you seem to forget to use punctuation like commas and the like. I think there's a tool online you can use to help you out on that.

Secondly, all images should be thumbnails, not simply placed on the article, along with some form of caption; you did this in his abilities section, so you should be able to fix the history and equipment section.

His history is good, nothing groundbreaking, but it's not bad either.

For his equipment, being able to generate weapons through slime is certainly creative, so I have to give you some points for that. I see he wields a scythe...not entirely sure about that, as I've heard a scythe is an unreliable weapon. Let me go into a few points from a site I like;the length of a scythe's pole makes fighting in small areas dangerous, as you're more likely to collide with obstacles and harm yourself than your target. The inner blade of the scythe, mind you, is facing directly at it's wielder; this is dangerous for obvious reasons. Wielding a scythe also limits the fighting style of the user down to three techniques in actual combat: a sidestrike with the focus on goring your target through the point of the weapon, using the edge to cut off limbs or the head of the target, or a quick spin for repeated stabbing. Predictability makes for an easy counter.

There IS a weapon called a war scythe that is actually meant for combat. Perhaps opt for that instead?

To be a weapons master is fine, however (and this extends to the abilities in general), it needs more detail. Tell the reader which weapons he specializes in most, even in the abilities section. I like the Slime Magic (and this isn't just my perverted side talking), as it seems like an interesting and versatile magic. Certainly not one you'd expect to see. However, like the other abilities, his spells could use some expansion.

In short, Kazaku is a good character but he needs to have some things fixed: namely grammar, as well as the expansion on his abilities. You're doing good with him, Ikaruza.