Talk:Aurora Frost/@comment-3061966-20120828011823

Okay, my thoughts. (Finally, I know, I should of gotten back to you sooner.) I don't sugarcoat my opinion -- just leaving that as a disclaimer of sorts.

In my opinion, the only real issue with this character's page is spelling, grammar, etc. That's what hurts this article's quality.

With that said, she's a good and interesting character. I like Aurora. Her personality section was interesting in that the girl actually became a troublesome person after joining a guild. Usually, people grow in a positive light after joining a guild. Even though she's gotten a bit kinder, she's still not a peachy person.

Next, there's her background. Which was rather interesting. I think you did well with that, however, grammatical issues can overshadow that for some. The actual content is interesting. Aurora also happens to be one of the few mages on this wiki who wasn't born or raised in Fiore. Interesting bit with her beating those thieves at 10 with the trap. The Selene part at the end surprised me, an evil siblings always makes things interesting, eh? Furthermore, I found the part of the Frost Family being tasked with defending the Northwestern (Yes, it's Northwestern not North-west) border a nice added detail.

She has a nice set of equipment. The Grimoire and wand were a nice add on, BTW. Aside from that, her arsenal of cards is impressive. On the cards, you don't need to italicize the descriptions, that just looks bad.

Aurora is an interesting character. YET, you need to really work on your grammar and spelling. That's the main area that this page needs improvement in, and it's a critical area.