Talk:Dragon Gunfire's S-Class Promotional Trial X805 - My Strength/@comment-26015064-20170614005932/@comment-26015064-20170614010408

Your sentence structure was difficult to understand, which hurt your overall story and the reader's ability to know what was going on. You also didn't format dialogue correctly, as there's supposed to be a period, comma, or semi-colon (depending on how you want to present the dialogue), before and after dialogue.