Talk:Chapter 14 - Wolf in Sheep’s Clothing/@comment-21119641-20180130031903

''"If she wanted to start a pissing match, she should've remembered I've got her boss on fucking speed-dial." - Jaina''

''"But I'm sorry, would you prefer I lied?" - Peltin''

HOW DID THESE TWO DOMINATE THE WHOLE CHAPTER WITH A SINGLE PERIOD?!

Man, honestly, such a dialogue heavy- YET- so good! Most people really lack at doing a dialogue-only chapter, and you nailed it with the tension, how the characters interacted, and what they thought then. Amber is such a consistent character, I'm liking her presentation the most out of anyone.

Chapter got funny bits too, Shelly trying to shoo Leo off, Rift's comments- Just, pretty fun~ I was surprised to see Payla acting so nice... since that first meeting, but then I wasn't surprised when she got all threaty threaty, and had the audacity to grab Amb by her sore arm, c'mon, we all know she chose that arm on purpose.

Though, I like how you make the situation both light and heavy, it feels funny to know it's just a small beef between them, but then, with how Payla reacts at Amber... YOOOOO!

All in all, more than a solid chapter! A few grammar here in there, but, it's been nearly 3 years :V also, I'd like to point out, just as an advice... every time you start a new paragraph, to use the speaking character's name before you use any pronoun? May just be me.

Even so, I'll be giving you 10/10!