Talk:Indra Svargaloka/@comment-3549833-20160403051236

Alright, after much wait, here's my review of Indra; sorry for that, I've been busy. When we first set about giving guidelines for the DSR entry I said to the others that one paragraph is the bare minimum as long as they listed the criteria, but other than that they could do as much as they want. Other than that, the reviewers didn't have to comment on anything that was outside of the criteria, so I'm going off what I already assessed about him. So, let's go.

>Your character must be either eighteen or over eighteen; anyone lower will immediately be refused.

He's eighteen, check.

>The character must have no halfassed work like just "Ice Dragon's Roar allows the user to shoot ice from their mouth" and nothing else. Anything less than a paragraph for each section (excluding appearance, synopsis history, relationships, and trivia) will immediately be refused- before anyone asks, one complete character is needed to even make a Slayer Magic, so this is more or less automatically achieved. Don't worry, you'll have a lot of time to finish if you plan on entering, more on that below.

Of course, you passed this section with flying colours. While only one-two things are unfinished, Indra has your usual obsession with detail plastered over all over him.

>Your character must have a well-defined reason to enter the Dragon Slayer Royale. Anything goes really, but try and detail what your character wants to participate so it makes sense why'd they'd be there

Yeah, you told me before if I remember.

>Grammar and punctuation must be 90% correct; aka make sure we can read the article instead of just shoving it through a translator.

Passed.

>Your character shouldn't have an excess of secondary magics; well, they technically can but you can only use one non-elemental magic alongside your Dragon Slayer Magic, so if you have a lot of magic, please tell me which one you'll be using.

While there are quite a few magics attached to Indra, you'll need to explain which one he's using alongside his DS Magic before we start.

Honestly, the only complaints I genuinely have with Indra are the lack of kanji with some things and some translations which look a little bit awkward- those aren't a real big deal, though. I specifically love his personality, it's friggin awesome.

The reason I kept this short is because I couldn't figure a way to expand 'he's breddy gud' into an essay. Also I'm terrible at reviewing. Anyway, good job.