Talk:Razaul Sventorsa/@comment-3061966-20130723173349/@comment-3061966-20130725023927

First off, drop the attitude.

Second, I now he's no god. I'm saying tone down Lord of the Elements.

Now, as for what gives a "like a god" type air about his character. I'll quote some stuff.

"He now resides in a mystical place, known as the Black Land, an ancient ruin left behind by ancient civilization long ago, given the title..."

"he has been preparing an ancient ceremony, called the "Valpurga Festa" to gather several dark forces together, awaiting the return of his old ally to deliver the "salvation" and bring forth the final judgement to mankind. "

"The root of his origin lies from a distant world, far beyond the law and understanding of humankind on Earthland. "

"it is said that he can even use new elemental magic beyond his own knowledge, but so far, this has yet to be confirmed. "

"With complete realization of the elements of nature, he can perceive the life force of other creatures or inanimate objects, even sensing their alignments and power."

Side question: How does an inanimate object have a life force to percieve?

Anyway, it's nothing too serious. Small bits, really. Just things for you consider. It's why my comment was rather minor in the end. What I should say is not to try too hard in presenting him as a mysterous, powerful man from a time long forgotten. And is the Black Land just another parallel world like Edolas?

And just my two cents, if you're going give him a "demon form", one would expect something a bit more beast-like. But that's up to you, ignore that piece of advice if you desire.