Talk:To Set Sail/@comment-4072803-20131221213228

This chapter was an improvement, there was some good plot progression. I'm excusing MOST grammar mistakes, for reasons you should know. The comedy scene at the beginning (wth Reggie, Meredy, and Hershell) was frankly, kinda badly handeled and I'm still not sure what the joke was, nor why Reggie acted why he did. I assume you're setting up a love triangle between Damon, Samantha, and Meredy, which is interesting, but it was handeled clusmily. I get the feeling you're trying to put it in a vague fashion, but i'ts kinda hard to tell.

The fights were okay, though it was hard to follow which characters were using what at times. Also, who's Kalen? Some more introduction and maybe a character appearence. If he has a page I'd recommend linking to his page in the article, like when he was introduced. All in all, this chapter was a bit better, but not without it's problems.