Talk:A New Goal/@comment-4072803-20150501031913

First off, the way you somehow combined both old Spiderman and Adam West Batman references into one is nothing short of LEGENDARY!

That out of the way, the chapter itself was somewhat lacking compared to the last. Still good, mind you, but some scenes felt like they dragged out a little too long, and the use of "but yeah", or "yeah" in general feels a bit out of place, and I'd recommend keeping that sort of language out of a story like this, as it feels more like the author is speaking to the reader rather than the reader 'seeing' events play out. It's not bad, per see, but it feels a bit... off to me. I do like that the plot is developing nicely and the various participants in the tournament allying with Damon was very well done as well (though I don't entirely get why they were crying at the end there). There was some good buildup for the next arc there as well, so I'm interested in seeing how that goes.

All in all, while not necessarily as good as last week's chapter, I still found this one pretty well-done.

8/10