Talk:Chapter 10 - Primal/@comment-4072803-20150416185643

Well, you weren't kidding about there being more action. Overall it was well written, though I'd recommend throwing in a few exclamation marks when something paricularly epic or shocking (or just decently placed in general), since it gives more of a feeling of excitement and action than keeping it to periods and commas. That's more of my writing style, though, so you don't have to necessarily follow that advice if you like how you're writing so far. There were also quite a few more typos in this chapter and at times it started to become noticeable in a bad way (the most notable at times was someone turning "pail"). All in all though, I still had a lot of fun with this chapter.

7/10