Talk:Fairy Tail: Sin — Chapter 1/@comment-6028353-20150817050406

So, in all, chapter didn’t really catch my interest. Deciding factor pretty much boiled down to the fan service. Don’t get me wrong, I’m all for a bit of fan service here and there; either played for a good laugh or whatever. But when it’s all over the place for no apparent reason other than “just because” it sort of gets old real fast. One other gripe was that you don’t include links to any of your characters. This is more of a personal thing for me, as I’m absolutely horrendous with remembering names, so take that at what you will.

Positive notes however, because I hate doing these things completely on the negative, the writing style’s good. I’m no English major but I didn’t have to re-read anything to get what you were saying, so that’s good enough for me. Your characters all interacted fairly naturally, some of the banter was funny, and there were no “Perfect Reactions” as I like to call them. That combined with a few teasers to things that may come, I’ll probably stick around for a few more chapters to see if I get interested. So… yay for that.