Talk:Islander Arrival/@comment-4072803-20131202153632

Sorry, I'm gonna talk about grammar mistakes briefly here. That is, I'm fine with them on Wikis as long as I can still understand what's going on, or they don't become other words due to this. "Waist" into "whisp", I believe. Unless you meant to say that, in which case I would have no idea what that means.

Solid chapter, though. Reggie using an axe is terrifying, and considering it could've (and should've, with the way he used it), killed Damon. Samantha also scares me, and frankly, I don't know why. Also, where did Damon get the black robes? Why is Dante being kind of nice now? Wasn't he evil? Why was the little girl trying to stop them? Where they in the pirate ship? Are they technically pirates? Is this One Piece? Some explanation please.

But besides, that, this is a solid chapter. Your grammar has been improving alot, and the characters so far are legit. So just please explain things some more. I can even solve some of them. The girl wanted to stop them because they had taken the pirate ship. Damon borrowed the black robes from Shan or someone else here. Fix these things and the chapter would be more intersting and a bit funny.