Talk:Shiro Yoshimitsu/@comment-4666155-20121004020829

Oh boy....-presses a button on my scouter- let's do this: First, after the bold name, the words in parenthesis are meant to be in italics. Fix that. Now...I'm only doing his power level, Ash is stuck with the rest...poor boy. The Requip and Fire-Make are basic, nothing to really fear. ...The Take-Over, of course. "Take Over: Angel Soul" should merely say "Angel Soul" and it should have a bullet point next to it, showing that it stems from the Take-Over magic. Look over a Fairy Tail Wikia Character article before you do these things, or at least Ashy's example of an article. His Fallen Angel Soul... you already know my opinion on it, let's not even delve into that.

Grammar, once again. I know typos are a thing, I type fast as Speedy Gonzalez, but, try to monitor what you type in... "He prefers to bombard his opponent with a flurry of bone-shattering kicks or punches delivered at breakneck speeds in the areas that are non-life threatening that way he can follow up with depending on what going on."

- Expert Hand-to-Hand Combat

It's "what is going on" not "what going on", this isn't rap.

Enough magical power to land him a position as a Wizard Saint? Not so sure on that one.

Keen Intellect...I can't judge that because I don't, and will not, read your stories with this guy, but let's just say I chuckled...loudly.

"Pyromancer Power". Pyromancy is the ability to control fire. We have something like that. Know what it's called. FIRE MAGIC. Yeah, seriously, don't try to make him special by calling him a "Pyromancer". Just give him fame magic. And just because he uses Fire Magic doesn't make him immune from flames, that'd be a Fire Dragon Slayer.

In all honesty, just going by the crap I saw on Fallen Angel Soul, I can tell this article's magic will need to be re-hauled. Change Pyromancer to Fire Magic, there is no difference and since Fairy Tail has a term for it, don't make your own so your character will seem like a ~*super speshul snowflake*~ and yes, that spelling was intentional.