Talk:Kevin Drake/@comment-5004454-20120811002810

Hey SDNatsu (sorry your name's too long) can I ask you to fix your character up before I add him to God Eater. You haven't added his portait pic, and no offence but his story needs some work.

'He was once a slave in Bosco until his master taught him Take Over and released him from service.' doesn't really cut it. Most slavers wouldn't do that without a reason. You're not even trying.

Also, your magic looks interesting, but you need some pics to help with your explanations and it would look more credible.

I don't mean to sound rude, don't get me wrong, but I don't want to add your article the way it is now. You need to put more effort before I can agree, because right now it just seems to me like you typed a few sentences without even caring. And well, I care about what I write, so I need to see that you're serious too.