Talk:Dragon Gunfire's S-Class Promotional Trial X805 - A Chain and a Compass/@comment-26015064-20170605165529

Creativity: 4/5: You used an excellent strategy for finding the island, but it seemed a bit too simplimstic and not explained for a long amount of time.

Use of Scarios: 4/5: While I can't fault you on the overall length of the story, it did feel a little birsk considering all the waiting that occured. Although, you did make it to the island as instructed. It's just that Lucian was never really portrayed as bored from all the waiting, nor was there any indication he was actually doing anything. Also, are Thought Projections physical? If not, you didn't do too great of an explanation on how the projection got there in the firs place.

Logic: 5/5: He only used skills available to him, and possessed the means to gain transportation. I can't really say more.

Overall Story: 3/5: While all of the criteria were met, and as I said before, I will not subtract points based on length, the overall story itself seemed a bit simplistic. My major issue is grammatical issues and switch in tenses near the end. The story's outline is fine, but it overall seemed a bit rushed. Granted I did only give you a week to finish, you had gotten through the majority portion of the story early and could have at least fixed grammatical errors.

Final Score: 16/20

Let me know if you have any more questions.