Talk:Chapter 14 - Wolf in Sheep’s Clothing/@comment-4072803-20151116005512/@comment-6028353-20151116054243

Yay, more feedback.

Anyways, yes. Pretty much everything you just said. Amber’s more comfortable around them now, typical sibling arguments, and I finally touched on that bit with the council lady again. My thought process was that this mission only took a few days, so it’d be pertinent through most of the ark. But the fights came out a lot longer than I planned, so I guess that kind of blew up in my face. Also, you had it spot on again with the “swoop in and grab as much of our stuff as she could” bit. When Jaina was fired, Payla tried to appropriate a bunch of the guild’s resources. (Expect that to come up later too).

As for grammar, glad to see it’s improving. I don’t really use a proof-reader, besides just reading though it myself a bunch of times, but maybe that’s something I should look into.

Final note, yay, another 9.5. IMPROVEMENT