Talk:Draven Blade/@comment-4666155-20130227022145

So....let's see. First of all, introductions, hello, I'm your usually friendly neighborhood admin, Aha. I've seen enough comments on this article to see that it warrants my attention, as this is my department. Now, where to start? I'm glad to see you have an infobox up on the article. Quite a few new users don't have the sense to do that. Sadly, that is the only good thing on this article. Let's start with the introduction. Short, but it's acceptable, however, in an introduction, the character's full name must be featured, in bold, followed by the kanji/hiragana/katakana in italics. I'll be kind enough to provide it now. Draven Blade (ドレーベン ブレーヅ  Doreiben Bureidu). That is the translation I managed to procure. If you find one you believe is better, by all means, use it, however, it must be placed at the beginning of the introductory paragraph.

The appearance section is, in short,'' terrible. ''It should never be this short, even the simplest attire can have more detail than what you've written. Take a look, for example, at Angelica Howard's appearance section. While it is a bit much, as Ash is particularly descriptive and a decent writer, any appearance section should be at least one-quarter to one-half what he's written. You have two sentences. That is sad.

Now, Personality sections are difficult, I'll acknowledge that, and kudos to you for having something written at all. But the image placement in the section is horrible. We have galleries for this. Please remove these images, and place them in an image gallery, either at the bottom of the page, or an entirely new page attached to this one. A specialized infobox would be ideal for the latter option.

I'm quite glad to see the Arc of Six Paths is gone and you've resorted to different, more common magic. I have nothing to say on his magic section as there is not enough written, however, for a teenage mage, he should not be a candidate for the Wizard Saints. That's far too much for a mage so young, even I acknowledge that. Please remove that from his trivia and it should not be referenced again. That is a quick way to becoming a Marty Stu of any variation by giving what appears to be your main character (and a young one at that) one of the strongest rank any mage can obtain. I look forward to seeing this article improved and changed, and if you have any questions, come to me.