Talk:Gathering Allies/@comment-6028353-20150908041235

Ok, so because I sort of had a small hand in making this chapter, however small it was, not sure if it’s ok that I review it, but here we go anyway. Loved the opener; slapstick comedy, character interaction, stage setting. It felt like watching an episode of One Piece, so bravo, well done. Seeing Caribou act in a more casual manor was also a nice touch. Gave him a much better dynamic than a one dimensional Evil-jackass, so bravo again. The Nn’T reference was done awesomely too, and I also want to see a full blown fight play out in a library now.

Onto the story; plot’s advancing, which is good. The group’s splitting up, which may be bad. Damon’s made new allies, which is good, but Meredy seems to be going right towards the enemy encampment, which is bad. Stylist Alex who I don’t remember, which is bad. Nazer and Anorak have a rivalry, or a blondery… a blond rivalry… I’ll get back to you with something funnier to say on that. Which is… Shit, I’ve lost track. But the plot’s moving at a good pace, so well done once again.

 Onto the final bits, writing was well done. Didn’t take much to remember who was who, so that’s good, and I could pretty much tell what was going on at all times. Not sure it’s appropriate that I give it a grade, but fuck it. 8.5/10