Talk:Peaceful Trip/@comment-4072803-20131202152026

Let's start off by saying I loved the One Piece referneces and jokes in this chapter (rubber man anyone?). Also, the grammer really cleared up in this, it was much more coherent, well done! I'm going to overlook the small grammar mistakes (because frankly, they're everywhere on a site like this, and I make a few myself). On a final note, I won't say anything about the fanon characters since their personality is up to you, but I can't tell if Meredy is in character or not. I thought about touching up like this last chapter, but I'll put it out there now. I say it's hard to tell because we haven't seen her much in the canon series just hanging out and having fun, so for now, this is acceptable. Solid second chapter.