Talk:Chapter 17 - Sweet and Sour/@comment-4072803-20160213213416

Not a bad chapter this time around, though it did feel a bit slower and ended more abruptly than the previous ones (especially the ending, it kinda felt like the chapter just stopped without reaching too much of a cliffhanger or natural conclusion). Aside from that, it was once again pretty solid. Was glad to see the little bit of shipping still there and gosh dang it that brownie sounded amazing.

I'm kinda interested in what exactly is going to happen this arc, whether it's going to evolve into something more plot-related or stay as a sort of filler arc. For now it looks a bit filler-y, but that could change quickly and I'm looking forward to whatever you have in mind for the next events. Glad that we got some small elements of backstory for Shelly and development for a more minor character in Carra (or, at least, minor for now, who knows what's gonna happen).

Grammar was overall pretty good, but at the beginning there were some jarring gramatical errors, such as "their" instead of "they're", and "raiser" instead of "raised". Besides that though, everything seemed solid.

8.8/10