Talk:The Dream Begins/@comment-21119641-20150502183857

Awesome is the first definition of this chapter here!! I really liked the way you described the place and the such, I could really imagine it on my mind by yours words. It's really easy sympatize with Knave's person, I like him, honestly, though with Gopher I felt the same but ummmm I think I still need to see more of him. That may sound random but Erie (Lovely Erie <3) kinda sounded like Sakura when she complained things were on her way, though by that I like that she is a Action Girl :D

I won't lie I was expecting someone to be that cloaked person =-= but yeah lol, he wasn't after all. For the little action scenes, they were done pretty good as well though I wanted to see a bit more from the Cloak Guy. Knave's speech though, is probaly the Most Awesome Moment and his Badass Boast of this chapter, it really hypes me up for whatever he is planning to do :D plus the mysterious guy at the end, I was really expecting a name but ah well, guess it builds up suspense!!

Really good introduction-first chapter Zed!! Looking up for more!! I give it a 10/10!