Talk:Tangoing with a Rock/@comment-26015064-20170613213909

Creativity: 4/5: The usage of a stronger bullet casing to pierce through the golem's body was a good idea, but outside of shooting it over and over again you didn't really showcase that much in the creative department. Although, her usage of flames as a smokescreen and attack weapon at least somewhat makes up for this.

Logic: 5/5: Well, she didn't do anything stupid except for the bayonet thing, which frankly isn't enough to dock you a full point on.

Use of Scenarios: 5/5 Well, you certainly didn't make it easy for yourself. You used all the required material, and, as stated before, the bullet casings were a good idea.

Overall Story: 3/5 This story wasn't quite as good as your last one. Your grammar and spelling mistakes were very minimal, but in general I didn't get a sense of time, desperateness, or Aka's own emotional state through this story. Some dialogue Aka said to herself seemed uneccessary, or could've been internalized. At times, I wasn't even sure what Aka was supposed to be doing, although future lines would clear up some of my questions, it shouldn't have had to. It was adequate, just not great.

Final Outcome: 17/20

If you have any questions, let me know.