Talk:Highway To Hell/@comment-4072803-20170114015908


 * Ahem*

Well, this chapter wasn't bad at all. As I'm in the first-time position (of sorts) of reviewing a chapter written significantly by two people with noticeable differences of style, I'll try to cover them both fairly.

Flame's parts were as well-written as I'd expect from him, and the action was overall well-done. There were some light grammatical errors from what I recall, but nothing game-breaking. Damon's writing has improved a fair amount as well, though I devote special attention to two things in particular: