Talk:Aaron's First Trial: Aether Cade's Island/@comment-26015064-20170606203719

Creativity: 4/5: Hunting down your friend to take you to an island is an interesting way to go about things. I forgot Aaron was a Dragon Slayer, and that they get motion sickness. So that was a pretty original to get to the island. However, Aaron's sense of smell being that accurate is something that I have trouble believing. However, as he's capable of sensing magical energy, that generally makes up for it. My only issue with that is that Aaron has never met Aether, and that is whose magical signature the island gives off. Fortunately, the island gives off a huge magical signature, so Aaron still probably would've been able to feel it.

Use of Scenarios: 5/5: Using what you were given and what you already had, you did a pretty bang up job with your scenarios. So good job.

Logic: 4/5 You didn't forget about motion sickness like me, so I have to give you points for that one. My only problem with your logic is the amount of time I feel Aaron should've been able to stay in the shadow form, especially if he was being threatened to be devoured by the shadow world. Logically speaking, they likely would've had to take a few breaks to prevent Aaron from being absorbed.

Overall Story: 4/5: It was pretty good, interesting plot, reunited friends, but your grammar and syntax fell flat in a few places, as well as Aaron and Genisus' sparring match seeming almost completely unnecessary if it was only one punch each. Regardless, the overall story was well executed.

Final Outcome: 17/20

If you have any further questions, let me know.