Talk:Sahara Patagonia/@comment-1759748-20160318180114

Alrighty, here's my assessment:

The layout is exactly as expected of site users. so I can't gripe on it. The only real thing I don't like is the fact you used strikethroughs, since they add nothing more than flavor text. Beyond that, the grammer is accurate, as expected, so no qualms there either.

As for your reason, like Ash said, it's pretty standard, nothing to write home about, but its still a reason. However, I'm less judgemental on the why, for any reason is motive enough if you're really gung-ho about it. To clarify what I mean by any reason is enough. look at Goku, he spares freaky alien genotypes that murdered his friends on a regular basis, despite knowing full-well the risks, just because he's a nice guy. So long as Sahara has that kind of dedication to the cause she brings, I'd say its enough.

One thing I don't care for in your powers is that much of them aren't even written out, which is a pet peeve of mine when it comes to characters whose powers are literally their entire shtick. Since she's a Dragon Slayer, you should have spent more time on that than all the secondary magics you added in. Hidden Arts, Ult. Art, the Iron-Beige mode, all of those. Makes it hard to judge her as a DS rather than a random mage, ya know? As a character, she's well-done, but the DS section, which matters most for the tournament, is pretty medium-rare. And as noted by Ash, it'd be helpful to know exactly which of her secondary powers she'll use in the royale

Overall, I say she's a good character, just needs to expand upon the DS-centric stuf in my opinion.