Talk:Isanne Yukimura/@comment-3549833-20130410025037

Okay, here's my opinion.

Other than needing the proper kanji for some stuff (like spells; they're wrong- you don't use katakana for Dragon Slayer), it's not bad. Honestly I think it's cliche that a fair bit on this article is about her love for some dude but eh, it's not really my problem; I can't make you change a personality or drive.

I know LL is gonna bring this up, but I'm not too fond of her post-timeskip picture (at least in my opinion). She looks like a "damn throwout barbie doll who OD'd on makeup" as a friend of mine so eloquently put it.

What would help more is a bit of expansion on some areas, especially her personality and some of her abilities- there's not much there, and it makes her look rather weak; what shows how powerful your character is, is the descriptions- a paragraph's worth makes them powerful, while one or two sentences makes them weak.

Other than that, not bad if I do say so myself.